well errr....i dunno.....errr more comments.....mebe i'll read it when its completed novel...instead....as at the moment this is how im seeing it: 1. Devil story 2. Room-mate story 3. Dog Story.... i know i shouldnt see it as separate....but at the moment....its just how it feels....im sorry but its the truth...hope you dont hate me....-hug windyyyy --> i left suddenly yesterday becuase i had to nip out to get something and my mom was calling my a zillion times so left like immediately....chat to you later or some other time k
Lol.. thanks for ur comment sorry BBear... But i need to haf a character-development and character-introduction first before I progress deeper into the story lo...
^ i ming la.....which is why...im a wait for the completed novel.....i wait for you to be dai jok ga....-hug
aww dont worry la...i msure it'll come to you...hmm maybe you need some inspiration....add oil ah...jok ga
it's got a little better; especially with the evil girl Janie together with her dog towards the end. wonder what /where she have been doing with the dog. however, i think it's an overkill to have 1 whole chapter on just the disappearance and reappearing act of that dog. as for character building, i think it could have been a little better. like BBear stated, it does feel like 3 diff story. sorry ... dont mean to be over critical.
Actually i didn't mean the chapters to be written that way... But I thought i'll keep the chapters short and nice since some of us here don't like to read long essays... lol Originally, the dog chapter was supposed to be in Chapter 2 as well. It's ok.. i welcome feedback too.. Lol like I said, you are welcomed to comment/flame...
^ yup its a catch 22....the way to solve it is to get it published .....cant way to see it on the shelves
the devil dog.lol i like the story it's cool. i hope you finsh it,i realy get into horror story's,lol i think that Janie will kill Polly soon. and use her blood to open the gate's of hell.lol or she'll go to a crazy house.lol and we all know the dog has something in his ass,i like the part about the dog humping Polly's leg very funny but i think Kaelyn save for now,becuase Janie has feeling's for her maybe even a sex thing.lol poor Kaelyn you know Carl's a dead man.lol but keep up the great work!!
Chapter 3 and 4 sounds already much better than chap. 2 and it keeps us wondering how and why Kae's parents are not on speaking terms.
