Good bye

Discussion in 'Fan Fix' started by Shini_D, Jan 3, 2009.

  1. Shini_D

    Shini_D Well-Known Member

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    Spiraling down a path of uncertainty...
    Tears that threaten to fall but don't...
    Aching within the core of my soul...
    Standing back as I let you go...
    Broken into a million of unretrievable pieces...
    Holding onto the remaining pieces of our memories...

    Feeling of doubt...
    Cracking of my heart...
    Shatter of my esteem...
    Longing from the start...

    I dream of us when we're together...
    It's you where my mind would always wander...
    Through day and night it's you I miss...
    I wish I can keep hold of you forever and share with you a kiss...

    I drink myself into a stupour...
    I smoke replacing my tears...
    I listen to the wind's careless whisper...
    I murmur my love for you as if you could hear...

    You don't know the impact that you have on me...
    You placed me under a spell...
    Despite you say that you set me free...
    My heart is caged by you in a cell...

    I don't know if I want to walk away...
    I don't know if I want to stay...
    I don't know which path is the correct way...
    All I know is I wish that you would tell "Please don't walk away..."

    I don't want to cry...
    That's why I said good bye...
    I feel like everything we had was just a lie...
    But why is it still so hard to say good bye...?

    x
     
  2. tiffystars

    tiffystars Well-Known Member

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    i like it :)
    moving poem.
     
  3. brown_bear

    brown_bear ☆‧° ☆﹒﹒‧ ☆ ﹒﹒‧☆‧° ☆

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    awwww shini....thas such a sad poem....!!....but beautifully written...!!...

    i hope everything is okies with you~~~~! -hug
     
  4. Natsu

    Natsu Well-Known Member

    touching poem ~~ me likey it ^^
     
  5. S.N.Gaara

    S.N.Gaara Well-Known Member

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    nyce its really touching -innocent2
     
  6. Shini_D

    Shini_D Well-Known Member

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    It's from the heart... what can I say...
    Listening to the Acoustic Version of Haru Haru by Big Bang as I wrote this...
     
  7. its really nice poem sandra :) keep on writing..
     
  8. Shini_D

    Shini_D Well-Known Member

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    thank you kit gor ^^
    theres more where those came from...i can type up old ones...but they would bring back bad memories...sigh....
    x
     
  9. lala_bel_tempo

    lala_bel_tempo Well-Known Member

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    that is some stuff that i think some times..
     
  10. [mJ9]

    [mJ9] Well-Known Member

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    wow,your poem is sad but amazing...keep writing
     
  11. sams12345

    sams12345 Well-Known Member

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    aww, so touching... very deep in emotions... its a great poem and is nicely put into words... keep up the good job!!!
     
  12. t3RRy

    t3RRy New Member

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    touching but also... reminds me something... sad sad... :(
     
  13. JulianKevin

    JulianKevin Well-Known Member

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    touching and sad poem!
    Good job.